Marietta suspected strongly by the end of the week, but had little opportunity to pinpoint any proof. She spent every spare moment with Henry in the subtle pursuit of slipping him up, jarring the conversation into unexpected turns. Yes became a rather indifferent okay or alright, no matter how many different ways she managed to ask for affirmation. He veered around plurals and possessives as if they were road kill.
How many balloons are there? she asked.
Eight, said Henry.
Not seven? It looks to me like there are seven.
Henry stiffened but didnt back down. Huh. I thought I noted one more.
You mean you thought you spotted it? Saw it, maybe? Noticed it, even?
Henry tied the balloons to the chair and turned to face her.
I didnt note it, he said.
And that was the end of that.
Marietta wondered if she was the only one to detect it, or just the only one with the guts to play the game with him. She wondered if he was a better person for it, and delighted herself with the times when he couldnt cross his way out of it.
Marrying a man with a lisp wouldnt be too much of a problem, she thought. There wasnt an s in I do.














Comments
It kept me completely engulfed until the last word.
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"Life is like a roll of toilet paper. The closer to the end it gets, the faster it goes."~ Unknown
I, myself, have a problem saying "s" sounds and I could relate to Henry trying to avoid the "s" sounds. Very Realistic. =]
How'd you come up with this idea? It's Fabulous tho!
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Life is just what happens to you,
While your busy making other plans.
Great job dear!
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Hello world! I love you.
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Now me lay down to sleep.
Mow da zeebas down like sheep.
Give dem to me nice and dead.
Me no happy til me fed.
-Bedtime prayer of crocs, Pearls Before Swine
That's the only thing I found wrong with it...
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"Ah...this is a bit awkward, ahaha..."
"And when I say 'awkward', I mean for you. Not so much for me."
I'd favorite it and adore it if the ending didn't stab me some how! I kinda got it without you having to tell me she wanted to be engaged, and the comparison of a lisp to "I do" (that might be what really makes me cry) ...I don't know, the first two paragraphs really made my heart stop with how impressive this was, but somehow I lost that in the 3rd para.
Anyways, keep it up! liked it none the less!
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When you look at a person, and you feel like you know them better than themself, then that is only because you know yourself better than they know themselves.
Maybe could have been written a little better, but great idea! ^.^
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Why not check out a random deviant [link]
You never know what great talent or art you might stumble upon
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Searching my heart for it's true sorrow
This is what I find to be:
That I am weary of words and people
Sick of the city, wanting the sea.
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